Comments for Weekly Writing & Blogs

Comment on Discussion Group by Olivia Riley

Olivia Riley — Thu, 05 Dec 2019 17:07:51 +0000

I am on the left hand side when you first walk in to sykes

Comment on Project 2 Draft 2 by Leann Carroll

Leann Carroll — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 23:27:34 +0000

positive: I really like your idea
constructive: try to make sentences flow better
quotes work well

Comment on 800 word draft by Leann Carroll

Leann Carroll — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 23:23:05 +0000

positive: good introduction, gets to the point
constructive: explain more
good use of Percy

Comment on 800 word draft by Katherine Sola

Katherine Sola — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 22:03:28 +0000

Praise: Really good intro
Constructive: Add transition words to the beginning of paragraphs
Percy: Awesome quotes

Comment on Draft 2/ Project #2/ Topic 1 by Timothy Domanowski

Timothy Domanowski — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 14:17:24 +0000

You need one more reference to Percy and about 300 more words to complete it besides the lack of content your work looks competent and achieves its goal of convincing the importance of general education.

Comment on Draft 2 of Writing Project 2 (Link), Gabe Jasinski by Noah Heslop

Noah Heslop — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 00:28:26 +0000

Praise: Good way to use your own major as an example.
Constructive: Might have to break this up because it does not flow and doesn’t get to the point well.
Percy: quote him at the end to have him support your ideas, not you support his first.

Comment on Project 2 Draft 1 by Noah Heslop

Noah Heslop — Wed, 13 Nov 2019 00:11:39 +0000

Praise: Good point, this is what i do in my ESS lecture. Try to relate these points to actual classes also.
Constructive: 12 hours a week seems like a lot of time just for students outside of class. Will profs have enough time to plan their lectures too?
Percy: Good connection to a Percy idea. Maybe could quote him on something related to this.

Comment on Project 2 Draft 2 by Samantha Weitzel

Samantha Weitzel — Tue, 12 Nov 2019 16:20:31 +0000

Praise: great idea!! – One thing that all students should do to help maximize their learning outside the classroom is developing a daily reflection. This can be something that allows the student to plan their day out, write down their goals, and get their work done on time. This is important because students need to space out their time and make sure they have time for certain things.
Constructive: reword sentence. . Utilizing the sources on campus during free time is always a good thing that students can do as well.
Percy: quote works well with topic- In Percy’s “The Loss of the Creature” he explains how “a student may simply be strong enough, brave enough, clever enough to take the dogfish and the sonnet by storm, to wrest control of it from the educators and the educational package” (Percy 5).

Comment on 800 word draft by Samantha Weitzel

Samantha Weitzel — Tue, 12 Nov 2019 16:02:01 +0000

Praise: Great introduction, set up for a great paper.
constructive: could be a stronger topic sentence.
Percy: great job explaining Percy’s quote.

Comment on Draft #2 link by Samantha Pawluczyk

Samantha Pawluczyk — Tue, 12 Nov 2019 14:56:03 +0000

Praise: I really liked your idea of students shadowing other students in order to learn in a new environment.
criticism: Make sure to be specific about how students benefit from each point.
quotes connection: Your quotes have a good connection to your topic