(Mia)- Overall I think you did well in organizing your topics within your paper.
(Mia)-Cite a quote like this: “…” (Percy pg#).
(Emily) At the end of this paragraph, I would add one more sentence to conclude the paragraph because it will transition better.
(Emily)
This is a good example that connects to Percys beliefs well.
(Emily) -I would find a quote for this paragraph to defend your point.
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