(Mia)-I am pretty sure even though we are all reading from the same source it still has to be properly cited.
(Mia)-I think that this paragraph needs a little tweaking. The whole paragraph should be based around the last sentence because I think that is a strong point. Try to take out some of the more wordy repetitive sentences and replace them with stronger ones.
(Emily) this is a strong quote for this point, just make sure it is cited correctly.
(Emily)- your first two points are valid and relevant to your topic.
(Emily) – overall, I think you are on the right track. There are just some grammatical errors that can be easily fixed.
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