Praise- lots of detail is seen in your thesis. Good work, just work on adding a transition sentence.
Constructive- good sub points. work on expanding on these ideas. how are you going to challenge students? how are students going to be given new knowledge?
Percy- It is now apparent that as between the many measures which may be taken to overcome the opacity, the boredom, of the direct confrontation of the thing or creature in its citadel of symbolic investiture, some are less authentic than others.
