David:
Praise: Your subtopics completely support your thesis
Constructive: your paragraph format is just how you need it to get a good grade. Make sure you have no grammatical errors
Percy: your quotes support the sub topics well.
Seamus:
Praise: I like your statement that field trips or visual learning can give you better learning
Constructive: Maybe reference Percy or start with a question in the intro paragraph to make it stronger
Percy: Your Percy quote supports your field trip solution well
Haley:
Haley Clarke
Praise: I agree with your statement that discussion panels are a great way for people to have an opinion
constructive: your paper is well formatted but you might want to add a little more bulk to the last two paragraphs
Percy: your knowledge from the readings of Percy showed greatly in your paragraphs when comparing Percy to your sub-topic
