- Praise: I really like your idea for a part time job, and how you relate it not only to a student’s future job, but also how it helps them now.
- Negative: I was also thinking about writing about tutoring, but Professor Cream said it is too closely related to the classroom/ student-teacher relationship, so it can’t be used
- Use of Percy: Like Gabe said, you should use Percy’s ideas and quotes to make your arguments stronger and more easily understandable
