Praise:
Makayla: The second and third paragraphs are super in depth and well understood by a reader.
Maura: The first body paragraph is super strong and really offers a lot to the rest of the essay.
Gwen: You have a super good connection between WCU and your claim consistently throughout the essay.
Constructive:
Makayla: Try to include Percy in your introduction.
Maura: It might be beneficial to try to add some more to the intro about the specifics of your claim.
Gwen: Maybe try to add more about Percy to the last paragraph and include some quotes.
Percy:
Makayla: The connection to Percy in the third paragraph really helps connect the quote to your claim.
Maura: Add some more about Percy, especially quotes, to strengthen to connection to Percy.
Gwen: This is good support to your quote and claim but it’s difficult to connect to Percy with just one mention of him.
