Praise: I like how you are using the course EGP 209 as a general theme to your essay, it’s a very good way to hold everything together and keep the main focus intact.
Constructive: Your introduction is very good, but in high school I learned “show, don’t tell”, so instead of saying “In this essay, I am going to discuss…” find a better way to show the reader what you will be discussing without directly saying it.
Percy: The use of Percy in your introduction is a very strong opener for your essay. The quotes you have selected are also very strong, but they need to be cited in the text.
