Haley Myers
Praise: You have good ideas and I like how you incorporated that students learn differently.
Constructive: Your thesis is more as an intro than a thesis. A thesis should be short and concise. Your last example of how it can be recovered does not have a lot of information. So try and get more reasons to support it.
Percy: Good use of Percy, just integrate the quotes into how one is able to learn outside the classroom.
