Jake Drap, Tyler Evans, Cristian Galilea
Praise: I think your thesis has a lot of good ideas and plenty of room to branch off of and write a powerful and persuasive paper.
Constructive: However I believe that if you included Percy’s ideas or just compare him to support your ideas in your thesis then it will be a lot more powerful and you will get your points across better.
Percy: I think the quotes that you do have support your thesis and i believe Percy would agree with your thesis.
