Topic # 3
Team: Mimi Riley
Thesis: I will discuss the comparison of Student teacher relationships from Freire’s “The ‘Banking’ Concept of Education” to teachers and students here at WCU. I will also bring in real life situations to add more of a comparison.
hierarchy grading communication age
Quotes: ” Education thus becomes an act of depositing, in which the students are the depositories and the teacher is the
depositor. Instead of communicating, the teacher issues communiqués and makes deposits which the students patiently
receive, memorize, and repeat.” (Page1, paragraph 5)
“a. the teacher teaches and the students are taught;
b. the teacher knows everything and the students know nothing;”
constructive : The thesis just needs more details to make it more interesting or examples.
positive : I think that the quotes you used will make your essay interesting and real life examples will also be really cool to read.
Bella and Noah
Constructive: Needs to work on developing the thesis further and finding a solution because it is not argumentative. Also needs ways to connect thesis to Freire’s work. Identify the problem and use that to find the solution.
Substantial Feedback: Quotes support main topic. However, without a solution, there is no way you can progress. Confused about “hierarchy grading communication age” line in the middle.
Bella: This topic has great potential, but you just have to keep working. You’re doing great sweetie.
Noah: The quotes you chose have a deep meaning behind them and will help you strengthen your argument.
Maybe make your thesis a little stronger and add key points you will discuss in your essay.
I like the quotes you chose and I think they will fit in your essay really well.