Positive: Great thesis it really explains your viewpoint well
Negative: Maybe start your paragraph where you are explaining your ideas like with exactly what your sub points ( four ideas to support your topic) it’s not clear what each body paragraph is about from the first sentence
Riley: You did a great job explaining your sub points in your thesis and then expanding on them in their own paragraphs. Great job with quotes and using Percy.
Gabby: I love the quotes you chose to support your ideas in the essay. Quotes relate back to your main point of the paragraph very effectively. Don’t forget to cite Percy with page numbers
