Positive: Overall your essay is forming well, if you continue to delve deeper into these areas of thought, then incorporate Freire’s writing you should have a decent essay in the end.
Negative: I would try to break your essay up into more than two paragraphs, also MLA format, it can get hard to read. (Fixed the font and double spaced it)
Use of Percy: Great example followed by a clarified explanation, I would delve deeper into this topic before heading into Freire.
