Praise:
Makayla- I like how you used a quote in your intro
Maura- The connection between West Chester, the problem, the solution, and Percy is strong.
Gwen- Your off to a really good start I think that your paragraphs are strong especially your intro
Constructive:
Makayla- Type the full number (twelve- fourteen)
Maura- try to work on your transition from paragraph to paragraph
Gwen- avoid talking in first person
Percy:
Makayla- This is a good quote in connecting Percy to your idea of students shadowing other students
Maura- The explanation you had with this quote is very good and backs up your idea
Gwen- I think connecting Frier and Percy in your essay is a great idea because it adds more evidence
