Praise: You are very clear and concise on the problem of education on how students aren’t given enough courses that focus on their major but rather other courses. The problem is well established and your quotes re very strong to support Percys ideas.
Constructive: You need to transition into the quote in your paragraph and not start it as a new sentence. Also, I think you need a clearer thesis of the problem and the 4 ways you intend to solve how student’s education can be improved/or is necessary to have courses beyond the major.
Use of Percy: Your use of Percy here is very strong and evident to support your idea. try to think of a solution to fill this gap rather than critic it.
