1 Praise: I like the way you worded your intro. Starting off with a question helps engage readers to want to know what you’re going to be writing about in your essay. You also have some solid ideas for your topic.
1 Constructive: Try re-wording certain parts of your essay so it flows more easily.
Use of Percy: Your overall use of Percy seems to support your points really well. This quote especially helps support your sub-point and you explained the context of it nicely.
