constructive: I think your opening paragraph is very well said but I would try to clearly state you four ideas on how to better learn in the classroom
use of Percy: I think this is a good quote by Percy that directly relates to the problem you are talking about in the paragraph. Maybe try to elaborate on the quote more though
praise: I think internships is a really good idea to get students to learn more. Do your solutions all have to be for in the classroom though?
