Leah
Praise: You made sure you described the topics and how Percy’s view of the topics will help change at WCU. The explaining of the issue of learning is the whole point of the project and you did a very good job of explaining.
Constructive: For the conclusion, restate the four main points that you had and bring all of the information back to conclude the whole essay.
Percy: Your quotes explain exactly what the problem of this is and Percy’s opinion of how education is flawed.
Amanda
Praise: I like your idea and the concept that teaching needs to be altered to require students to make the most of the “package”. I strongly agree that a trip outside of the classroom can enhance student’s learning and knowledge.
Constructive: Overall, I think you have a strong body, but you could change up the words a bit
Use of Percy: The quotes you used are relates to your topic, but I think you should elaborate more to it.
