Lauren:
Positive-I think your ideas about use of time outside class are really good
Negative- Relate your thesis to percy.
Percy- I see that you are planning on using the idea of the educational package and i think this would be great just make sure to relate it to your ideas
Jeff:
Positive: I think that there is a good thesis and you will be able to bounce ideas off of it.
Negative:The only thing about thesis that could use more work is the opening sentence, that could use some work to get people’s attention
Percy: The quotes are good they have a good relation to your topic
Sami:
Positive: I like the start to your thesis and like that you give examples for how to do it
Negative: However it sounds a little too repetitive as well
Percy: I like the Percy quotes that you choose and think it matches your thesis
