Lauren’s Team
Lauren:
-Positive: I love the idea of having discussions instead of class, I think it’s important to step back and learn from the unexpected.
-Negative: There a few typos, try to come up with more examples/ideas on how we can learn in situations besides the classroom
-Percy: I like how you said teachers talking about unrelated topics, try to tie this in to how Percy’s idea that you can never learn from whats intended. Ex, cant learn math in math class but maybe you hear someone talking about a new artist that you learn about in that class. Sounds weird but thats what percy says.
Jeff:
Positive: Your thesis is very strong it really hits the key points through out it. The quotes are good and can fit your topic well.
Negative: there is some extra sentences that could be cut out of the thesis or you could combine some of the ideas to make it shorter.
Percy: The quotes are good there is enough there to back up your ideas
Sami:
Positive: the content of the your essay is really good and you’re on the right path with using evidence from both Percy and Freire
Negative: However there are some grammatical errors and minor mistakes that you should look over
Percy: I also like the way you interpreted Percy’s quote and even gave a great example of how to execute it
