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Peer Review – Draft 2 – Makayla’s Team – Weekly Writing & Blogs

Peer Review – Draft 2 – Makayla’s Team

Constructive: 

  • I think you guys have a pretty good intro. I think it can be expanded more. You use “in” a lot to start sentences, maybe vary it. For the one sentence you can be like “High school students could spend extra hours analyzing the content learned from class; yet, in a college setting, students are expected to study extra hours to excel in their studies.”
  • I would get rid of ” the first way that a” and Just start and say “students can get involved…by joining clubs”
  • replace says with “acknowledges that,”
  • Instead of saying professional in second body, I would say “more prepared for the workforce”

Praise:

  • I really like the quote you used and your explanation. You make it very clear to the reader.
  • very good explanation of the quote in second body. It was very clear and concise.  

Percy:

  • All your quotes clearly emphasize your topic in the ways you plan to solve the problem of student involvement outside of the classroom. I would just transition into your first two quotes a little better than saying “Percy says”

Author: Haley Myers

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