Praise:
Maura: You have some very strong points in your thesis that you can write your paper on
Makayla: I like how you connected both Frier and Percy in this essay, i feel like it will really back up your work and support your topic.
Gwen: I think the idea of having open discussions is a great idea for the topic you picked.
Constructive:
Maura: There are a couple typos in the third sentence that could be fixed
Makayla: I think your thesis is a little long
Gwen: shorten your thesis and make a clear point on what the essay will be about (thesis statement)
Percy:
Maura: The quote from Frier backs up your idea of teachers teaching, but try to find more Percy quotes on that as well.
Makayla: I think that the two quote you picked could potentially be very useful when supporting your evidence.
Gwen: I think you can relate the dogfish quote from Percy to the idea of how teachers can teach topics that aren’t related to the class
