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Madison Barker – Weekly Writing & Blogs

Final discussion post

Topic: Do you think this writing course prepared you for other higher level writing courses and do you think this course has made you a better writer.

I think this course definitely made me a better writer. With the first draft I brought for review, I was told “this is a very high school essay.” I knew exactly what Professor Cream meant. My writing was very structured, but in a bad way. After meeting with professor Cream countless times for edits and brainstorming, I believe my writing improved greatly. I think if I had not taken this course, my writing abilities would not be strong enough to write formal essays for other classes, let alone a higher writing course. This course helped me to understand how to better connect the ideas of others to my own ideas. It also helped me to better understand what effective writing is and what it takes to be a good writer. I also appreciated the in class discussions, as they helped shape my ideas. I will definitely apply the criticisms and critiques I was given by professor cream in the future courses I take. I would definitely recommend this course to all incoming freshman, as it taught me how to break away from the “high school essay” mold.

Proposal Review 1

Constructive: Focus more on what you aim to prove this seems more like an SOD

Percy: go more in depth with your ideas linked to Percy and differentiate them more, they’re very similar

Praise: good quotes that connect to your ideas just make sure you analyze

Review 1

Percy: I like this quote for your idea but maybe explain it in a sentence.

constructive: further explain this in order to get your point across better

positive: overall really good!! your points are very strong

Long Draft Comments 2

Use of Percy: make sure you mention his writing, but good introducing him right away

Praise: good job linking all of your solutions to West Chester and Percy. Very good and strong points

Constructive: watch out for run on sentences and small grammatical errors

Long Draft Review

Praise: Good job introducing both Percy and Freire in the opening paragraph.

Constructive: watch your tenses and make sure you don’t switch it up

Use of Percy: good quote but you don’t need to introduce his writing again

response #4

Emily, Jake, Leah

I think travel can be both pleasure and a way of flaunting to others. I think people waste a lot of time taking pictures just to show people they were there. I also think people definitely travel for pleasure, as it is fun to escape your usual life. People will take and post many pictures from their trip often to brag that they went somewhere on a trip. I think it is better to go somewhere you are not familiar with so you can experience a new place that you don’t know. Going somewhere you aren’t familiar with can be a different experience because you have no perception or thoughts of what your experience could be. When traveling, it can be nice to be surprised by nature and things you may see instead of thinking you will see beautiful scenery that you’ve seen photos of and being disappointed. I think people can create standards in their heads of what they think will happen when they are on a vacation and it can create a disappointing experience. For example if someone has high expectations of what their trip will be they will get let down when their experience isn’t what they imagined.

topic proposal

Freire’s analysis of education argues that in order for students to be able to learn, they must take control of their own education without help from teachers. I believe the students at WCU have a lot of power over their education, but in different ways, can achieve their own emancipation.

One way is through FYE. If students stop showing up to FYE they cannot fail everyone. We won’t show up until there is an educational value to this class. Currently it is a waste of time and more educational for the professors who will continue to teach it in the future.

         Connection to Freire- Freire says Teachers aren’t teaching to the level that students need, but instead they teach to/for themselves (p1, par6)

Another way is by not showing up to certain Gen eds. As students we are forced to take general education classes that usually have no relation to their major.

         Connection to Freire- Students are being taught things that they are not involved in and don’t care about (list p 1 h. )

discussion 3 response

Ruthie L, Jake H, Sean R, Nick P, Christian G, Michael R, Jake D, Gabby L, Jason R, Liya S, Juliana B, Timothy D, Riley B, Maddie B

In our discussion we talked about banking education and problem-posing education and their strengths/weaknesses. We also talked about how the education system could be improved. I think it’s important for us to take ownership of our education. Freire compares students to containers and talks about how we are forced to just memorize all this information without really doing anything with it. Students are not really involved in their education. Just memorizing facts and restating them, over time they will easily be forgotten. I think that in order to truly learn, we need to use information and engage in it. Different activities or involving the students in the topic, rather than the teacher just speaking and memorizing, would be much more effective. Students should tie what they’re learning to their everyday life. By making these connections, the student will be able to remember the information much easier.

Freire and Oppression

Jake D, Gabby L, David H, Jason R, Maddie B, Timothy D

In our discussion, we talked about oppression and how different groups of people are “inside the structure,” as said by Freire. I think the people who are oppressed have less opportunity. It is well known that people born into wealthier families will most likely live in that lifestyle. On the other side, those born poor will most likely stay that way their entire lives. In society today, many different groups of people are oppressed. I think there should be more opportunity for those oppressed, to become more successful. I also think people should try and help those who are oppressed to stay on their feet. It is difficult to overcome poverty without help from others. Often times people will donate money to things that are not, in my opinion, as important as taking care of oppressed people. For example, people are donating millions of dollars to build a wall, while there are people who struggle to eat everyday.

Freire compares students to containers

The people at this discussion were Maddie B. Jason R. David H. Bella D. Nick P. Noah H.

Freire compares students to a container which can negatively impact their learning. If you compare a student to a container, they can be expected to cram a lot of information in a short amount of time. Students have many classes a day and have to memorize many facts and statements said by their teachers in that class. I think sometimes teachers forget that students are in many classes and can easily become a “full container” in just one class. I believe that a lecture is an ineffective way to teach a student, as it can be harder to memorize so much information. If students were more engaged in the lesson, they may be more motivated to learn. This might also help the student to retain the information better, as they can remember what they were doing and how they were involved in the topic, rather than all the information that was said to them in a large class setting. Students and teachers should work together to allow the student to participate in the topic being discussed that day in order to allow the student to engage in the topic.