Haley Myers
Praise: I think that the ideas you have created for education outside of the classroom are going to make your essay very strong, and help you to use Percy and Freire.
Constructive: Expand on this with connection to Percy.
For example:
Students constantly find themselves in the predicament in that the information presented in class isn’t clearly comprehended, Percy identifies this as the prepackaged ideas of a teacher. Everyone learns differently whether students learn visually, auditory, or physically. In this essay I will use Percy’s ideas to accommodate for all learners. Education outside the classroom will help students grasp complex information presented in class to improve their comprehension of their desired major and minor of study through tutoring, field trips, study abroad, discussion groups and internships.
Percy: I think that your use of Percy here is strong, Percy discusses that we need to see things for ourselves, learning outside the classroom is crucial, but only if the student gets rid of the pre packaged idea. Field trips and studying abroad can still become the banking concept of education… how can we make sure it doesn’t become that?
Kyle Owens
Praise: I think that this is essential for this topic, all students know how they learn best, to implement Percy in this you can say that students don’t learn from a prepackaged idea that the teacher creates… students have to learn for themselves
Constructive: Your thesis needs more to it, and you can not identify the professor, the topic is all about the students
For example:
As Percy has identified, the educator can do nothing for the student. In order to achieve teaching without teaching here at West Chester University, classrooms need to become more student based and incorporate styles of learning that benefit the student individually.
Percy: Another quote that I think would benefit your paper is from page 6. “For there is nothing the educator can do to provide for this need of the student, everything the educator does only succeeds in becoming, for the student, part of the educational package.”
