Praise- You have a strong thesis that includes your main points and ideas. I would add a little more detail. other than that it is great.
Constructive- I would add detail to this point. Explain why it is that students have a preconceived idea of learning. where did they get the preconceived ideas?
Percy- To put it bluntly: A student who has
the desire to get at a dogfish or a Shakespeare sonnet may have the greatest difficulty in salvaging the creature itself from the educational package in which it is presented. The great difficulty is that he is not aware that there is a difficulty; surely, he thinks, in such a fine classroom, with such a fine textbook, the sonnet must come across! What’s wrong with me? pg4 II